Thoughts on these latest adventure logs?

KalinoAltes
KalinoAltes
edited June 2014 in General Discussion
I'm looking for feedback on these adventure logs. How is the writing style and whatnot...

https://daern.obsidianportal.com/adventure-log/the-dark-tribe

https://daern.obsidianportal.com/adventure-log/the-search

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  • Basileus
    Basileus
    Posts: 585
    I liked them! The shifts in viewpoint came in nice, consumable intervals so it kept the adventure log fresh with the sense of a whole group participating simultaneously.
  • twiggyleaf
    twiggyleaf
    Posts: 2,006 edited June 2014
    Hi KalinoAltes

    I had already commented on DARK TRIBE and have left a further comment on THE SEARCH. In view of your request above, I would say that the descriptive writing is good and well written and that the dialogue is pretty dynamic, strengthening the characters and allowing humour to come through easily (e.g. Entry of THE MASK to the BAKERY). Personally, I find the log a bit too long, but if your players are happy with it, then my feelings won't matter a jot! However, with such a long log, you may wish to consider adding a couple of images - always helps to break down massive walls of text. (....and I still love that FONT!)

    twiggyleaf
    CURRENT CAMPAIGN: "Mysteria":http://www.obsidianportal.com/campaigns/mysteria - set in Wolfgang Baur’s MIDGARD.
    Previous CotM Aug 2012: "Shimring":http://www.obsidianportal.com/campaigns/shimring
    Post edited by twiggyleaf on

    "I met a traveller from an antique land....."

    CotM May 2016: Mysteria: set in Wolfgang Baur’s MIDGARD.

    Previous CotM Aug 2012: Shimring: High Level Multiplanar Campaign

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